GRE作文入门和进阶三

 　　GRE作文入门和进阶三

　　29.“Public figures such as actors， politicians， and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role， they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy.”

　　(病历文)

　　Everyone has the right to keep his/her privacy， including the public figures. People have the nature to learn others' privacy， especially those of the celebrities¹ for various reasons， such as reverance and curiousness， but it doesn't follow that they are entitled to pry² others' private life， and it is really unfair to say that any public figure choose to expose his/her privacy by himself/herself as long as he/she seek a public role.

　　In the current days， it is a widely spread atmosphere that people take a strong interest in talking about the private life of celebrities， they even rival each other in the fact that who knows more about a common interested celebrity³. To cater⁴ such a taste， more and more mass media try their best to collect each aspect of a public figure's private life with an interest even exceeding that of making known their work. When we read a entertainment paper or magazine， we are certain to find that most of the content are the private life of singers and stars， such as someone got a divorce with his/her ex-girlfried/ex-boyfriend and is now keeping contract with someone else， etc.

　　All that exists is not valid⁵， we couldn't say that it is in reason to spy into others' privacy just because most people prefer to do so， and we should not just accept a unfair fact without exert any effort to change the circumstance. To put your own feet in the shoes of the public figures， do you feel comfortable to be watched everywhere you go， and find a lot of affair news about you in the media especially when most of the news are made out by the pressmen? If your answer to this question is no， you should agree that we are obliged to do something to change the current situation about the private lift of public figures. Special laws should be enacted⁶ to discipline the prying⁷ into privacy of the mass media， sound should be heared arguing again people's interest in celebrities' private life.

　　Only when the public figures are librated from the harassment⁸ of worrying about their privacy's protection， we can expect a better service from them， and in that case， more capable people will be attract to pursue a public role. Suppose that if a singer is followed everywhere he/she goes， how can he/she lead a normal life as common people， how can he/she gets a relaxation⁹? He/she must be cautious when he/she every words， he/she can't expect a casual and relaxing atmosphere as every common people can enjoy. It is difficult for him/her to concentrate all their energy in working， as a consequence， we would lose some more brilliant performance we can expect otherwise.

　　In summary， we should call on the public to cease to spy into the celebrities' privacy and pay more attention to their public life， only in that way can the public figure enjoy their life better and can we expect a better service from them. (496 words)评析：这篇文章的主要失误来自作者未能仔细审题便下笔一蹴而就，题目所讨论的对象明明是Public Figures，从头到尾讨论的主体居然成了Public，说他们如何如何关注明星隐私，说他们如何如何设身处地地为明星们着想，最后总结说是公众应还明星们于自由之躯，把一上来合理的“否定回应”抛之脑后，从而导致文章“答非所问”。考虑到文章一上来合理回应，以及不错的语言表达，仅有几处不起眼的拼写错误，应判为“2分”(有严重错误类文章)。

　　在出示范文之前，我们就此题谈谈“审题”和“回应”这两个基本问题。

 

1 celebrities   

n.（尤指娱乐界的）名人( celebrity的名词复数 )；名流；名声；名誉

参考例句：

• He only invited A-list celebrities to his parties. 他只邀请头等名流参加他的聚会。
• a TV chat show full of B-list celebrities 由众多二流人物参加的电视访谈节目

2 pry   

vi.窥(刺)探，打听；vt.撬动(开，起)

参考例句：

• He's always ready to pry into other people's business.他总爱探听别人的事。
• We use an iron bar to pry open the box.我们用铁棍撬开箱子。

3 celebrity   

n.名人，名流；著名，名声，名望

参考例句：

• Tom found himself something of a celebrity. 汤姆意识到自己已小有名气了。
• He haunted famous men, hoping to get celebrity for himself. 他常和名人在一起, 希望借此使自己获得名气。

4 cater   

vi.(for/to)满足，迎合；(for)提供饮食及服务

参考例句：

• I expect he will be able to cater for your particular needs.我预计他能满足你的特殊需要。
• Most schools cater for children of different abilities.大多数学校能够满足具有不同天资的儿童的需要。

5 valid   

adj.有确实根据的；有效的；正当的，合法的

参考例句：

• His claim to own the house is valid.他主张对此屋的所有权有效。
• Do you have valid reasons for your absence?你的缺席有正当理由吗？

6 enacted   

制定（法律），通过（法案）( enact的过去式和过去分词 )

参考例句：

• legislation enacted by parliament 由议会通过的法律
• Outside in the little lobby another scene was begin enacted. 外面的小休息室里又是另一番景象。 来自英汉文学 - 嘉莉妹妹

7 prying   

adj.爱打听的v.打听，刺探（他人的私事）( pry的现在分词 )；撬开

参考例句：

• I'm sick of you prying into my personal life! 我讨厌你刺探我的私生活！
• She is always prying into other people's affairs. 她总是打听别人的私事。 来自《简明英汉词典》

8 harassment   

n.骚扰，扰乱，烦恼，烦乱

参考例句：

• She often got telephone harassment at night these days.这些天她经常在夜晚受到电话骚扰。
• The company prohibits any form of harassment.公司禁止任何形式的骚扰行为。

9 relaxation   

n.松弛，放松；休息；消遣；娱乐

参考例句：

• The minister has consistently opposed any relaxation in the law.部长一向反对法律上的任何放宽。
• She listens to classical music for relaxation.她听古典音乐放松。