09年12月四级作文预测及范文（06）（在线收听）

09年12月四级作文预测及范文（06）

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the

topic Does a Student Need Private Tutoring? You should write at least 120 words, and

base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
　　1)根据调查，目前在全国的大城市中有大约80%的中学生都有私人家教
　　2)分析中学生请家教的利弊
　　3)你的看法
　　Does a Student Need Private Tutoring? 　
行文思路
　　本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象，提纲第2点要求分析这种现象的利弊，提

纲第3点要求谈谈“我”的看法，由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。
　　根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述中学生请家教的现状;分析中学生请家教的利弊;谈

谈“我”对中学生请家教现象的看法。
　　高分范文
　　Does a Student Need Private Tutoring?
　　A recent investigation shows that about 70 percent of middle school students in

cities have private tutors. Such a popular practice indicates that people are [1]

attaching greater importance to education. [2]However, private tutoring [3]has both

advantages and disadvantages.
　　Many parents have no enough ability or time to help their children in study.

Private tutoring is a good solution to this problem. [2]In addition, private tutoring

is usually one-to-one, so the teacher can know [4]the weak points as well as [4]the

strong points of the pupil, and thus teaching is, [5]in most cases, directly to the

point. [2]On the other hand, private tutoring has its own disadvantages.
　　[2]For one thing, it takes up so much of the pupil’s time that he can hardly find

enough time for rest and entertainment. [2]For another, some tutors, [5]busy

“shuttling” from one family to another, [6]tend to neglect their teaching duties as

tutors.
　　[7]Considering the above-mentioned, I think [3]the disadvantages of private

tutoring outweigh its advantages.
　　In my opinion, greater emphasis should be laid [8]on classroom teaching and

practice, [8]on the improvement of teaching quality [8]and on the tapping of the pupil

’s potential. [9]Only in this way can a new generation be healthily brought up.

　【亮点点评】
　　[1]“非常关注”。
　　[2]过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
　　[3]“有利有弊”。“弊大于利”。
　　[4]“弱点”。“优点”。
　　[5]插入语。
　　[6]“倾向于，往往”。
　　[7]用于得出结论。considering用作介词，意为“考虑到，鉴于”。
　　[8]and连接的平行结构。
　　[9]“only+状语”位于句首，引起句子部分倒装。