09年12月四级作文预测及范文(01)
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Road Accidents. You should write at least 150 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1)道路事故会给人们的生命和财产带来很大的损失
2)分析道路事故发生的主要原因
3)如何降低事故发生率
Road Accidents 作文思路
本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点提出一个问题,提纲第2点要求分析造成该问题的原因,提纲第3点要求说明解决该问题的方法,由此可判断本文应为问题解决型作文。
根据所给提纲,本文应包含如下内容:指出道路事故的严重性及主要危害;分析导致道路事故的主要原因;说明应该如何降低道路事故的发生率。
高分范文
Road Accidents
Road accidents, [1]as one of the important social problems, have always been paid great concern. In most of the big cities, every day, there happen quite a few road accidents. In these accidents, many people suffer great property losses [2]and some of them even lose their lives.
[3]The following reasons contribute to road accidents. [4]Above all, traffic is becoming heavier and heavier, especially in big cities. More and more vehicles on road [5]increase the chances of accidents. [4]In addition, many drivers lack safety awareness and even don’t comply with the traffic regulations. For example, some drivers run the red light or drive after being drunk. [4]Besides, the [6]weak supervision and management of traffic control sectors is a noticeable reason.
[7]Considering the seriousness of the traffic problem, [8]it is high time for us to take more effective measures to solve it. [4]Firstly, the government should invest more money to improve public transportation and provide more transportation ways for people to choose. [4]Secondly, stricter laws and regulations should be made to punish those who break traffic regulations. [4]Finally, drivers should enhance safety awareness and develop good driving manners. [9]Only in this way could road accidents be avoided successfully.
【亮点点评】
[1]插入语,as意为“作为”。
[2]表递进。
[3]用于引出原因。
[4]过渡衔接词语,使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
[5]“增加了…的机会或可能性”。
[6]“监管不力”,weak的使用准确地道。
[7]“考虑到,鉴于”,介词。
[8]用于引出解决办法,表示解决问题的紧迫性,常译为“早该是…的时候了”。
[9]“only+状语”位于句首,引起句子部分倒装。
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